Yes...I'm a poet too...tho not very good

[kaijokucrossblade]

Lost Soul

Break my bones
Slash my wrists
Tear my heart out just for kicks
Watch the blood as it drips
And the pain and struggle as it rips

Torn on the inside
Tattered on the outside
Forgive and forget
Deceive without repent
It seems these are the things that you get

I've Forgotten that isolation isnt that bad
Atleast when you're alone
Nobody can hurt you
So leave me here
Drowning in my own blood

It's really the most humane thing to do
But then again, what do you know of humanity
All you've shown me is insanity
I'll take my chances on bleeding to death
Then find myself in your arms again

No longer will I Thank you for these scars
Nor these illicit memories
This seems like a nightmare
Amazing in the start, but punishment in the end
So I'll wake up from this inexplicably bitter dream, and wake up to an even more bitter reality

So my body lays in it's tomb
A premature burial
But Im not ready to be exhumed
Let me lay and rest
Because Death is only sweetly dreaming in silence

kthx

[stardragon]

Hmmm well it's kinda depressing but that seems to be the point so I'd say it's pretty good ;D

[kaijokucrossblade]

k thanks for the input and taking the time to read this

[stardragon]

I'm always glad to give an opinion If you'd like a more technical critique just let me know as I don't mind helping folks improve thier work, but unsolicited critiques tend to be ill recieved so I keep it simple usually

[24 Cows Of Ishmish]

Cool poem, in my opinion better than me. Very depressing and death...ish...but I like that! You can consider me goth and/or punk if you must, I don't care.

[poke]

ok first i love your poem and second i almost be came gothic over my summer break.

[~0RiGiN@l BrOk3n~]

Great poem