Persona Approvals

[stardragon]

All New Persona's must be posted here first for discussion and approval before I will move it to the appropriate color/craft/etc section of sheets.

[~0RiGiN@l BrOk3n~]

Owner: Fairydust

Name: Mischa
Age: 17
Rank/Class: Senior Weyrling (Windy)
Gender: Female
Family: Mother Milda, Father J'ra, Brother J'ay

Appearance: Mischa is very tall and skinny. She had short blond and brow hair that is choppy and layered. Her eyes are emotionless almond shapes of icy grey. Mischa is very black, always wearing the 'colour'.

Personality: Mischa is very quite and hardly ever talks to people. She is shy and unsocial. Some my call her one of the depressed sort. Mischa has ever really only had one human friend who died, her brother who is also dead was very dear to her. Mischa is very smart and very curious, Mischa now only trusts her dragon and her mother.

History: Mischa was always different ever since she was a baby. Mischa was like any normal baby, but at the age of four she just suddenly went quite, she has not cried since. At the age of five Mischa's parents split up and her mother abruptly took her and her brother from there home and moved them to this weyr.

As they settled in Mischa became friends with Leah. They were great friends and spent every living moment together, but at the age of eight Le aha died of a mysterious death. Mischa never cried, she just became a little more silent.

J'ra, Mischa brother was lost in between.

Pet(s):None

Dragon Name: Edyth
Age: 3 years

Appearance: Edyth is a small long green, with large wings. She has dark green eyes. She is of lime to dark green.

Personality: Quite and fast. She rarely speaks to others. Edyth is allot like Mischa. They understand each other every well.

Impression Story: There is nothing really to tell. Mischa was silently moving through the crowd, as if not there at all. She was looking at all the other weyrlings in the room and their dragons. Mischa made her way to a dark corner so she could sit. Yet there she found a smaller then average bay sitting there very much alone. Mischa looked into her small eyes and a small quite voice entered her mind {Mine?} it asked. {Yes}.

[~0RiGiN@l BrOk3n~]

I have changed the ages, are they ok?

[stardragon]

Well at 4 for the dragon they would not be weyrlings anymore unless they had serious problems in classes etc. Weyrlings usualy graduate at 3 turns old or thereabouts. I'd suggest making the dragon two, and add Windy to her Weyrling desgination, that denotes which class she is part of. The 17 for the girl is fine any which way about.

Also the brother can not have died in Threadfall since Threadfall has not started quite yet. The Pass is only set to start in a couple weeks IC time.

Oh and this might seem a touch nit-picky but No one never cries. As a baby she would have cired for food attention all that. Now once she was toddling etc she could maybe have developed the never cry attitude but even then it's a tad young for it.

[~0RiGiN@l BrOk3n~]

Ive edited, sorry forgot to post that I did so.

[stardragon]

Much better just two things now, again the brother can not have died in Threadfall, it hasn't started yet for this Pass, you'll have to find another reason he died.

And I don't recall seeing this before so maybe it's something you changed... A baby dragonet does not fit in a lap, thier head and maybe even front half if they are really tiny and just Hatched but they are much too long even ar birth to entirely fit in a lap. Oh and Mischa wouldn't have been looking for somewhere to sit the Hatching Sands are very hot and do not allow for sitting onthem.

Once those are fixed up you can copy and paste the profile to the Weyrling section